Tim Knowles
Nov 22, 2020

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Please use "we" and "us" less and use more definitive nouns. Some examples from your story.

"We allowed this to happen?"

"disasters that we have caused"

"We cannot go on like this,"

"require us to learn very complex science"

"for our continued survival"

I feel no affinity for those "we" or "us."

About whom are you really talking?

TEK

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Tim Knowles
Tim Knowles

Written by Tim Knowles

Worked in our nations space programs for more than 40 years

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